User:Cornholioo/krinks draft
As I've said the artice written by Iscariot is partially POV and partially wrong. Must stuff in it is right, but there are some mistakes. I have edited those mistakes but Iscariot has edited them back. He has also reported me to arbitration. The most important stuff is summed up here:
1. Wrong are the deaths at the Philosophe Knights. As the leader of the NSU I can say we killed no one. The coalition claims to have killed 'at least two' members of the PKs. There are no screenshots for this, but there are neither of any kill/wounded the NSU has received. If unsolveable we should call the number of deaths "dubious". 2. Wrong is the result of the battle. Every side has a reason to claim victory. Thus I'd like to limit this to territorial changes: the coalition has temporary left the Krinks. If unsolveable we should call the result "dubious". 3. Wrong is the end date of the battle. The coalition and the NSU have agreed to 21 March 2010. Iscariot changed it to 22 March 2010. The NSU think has to do with that the relocation of the NSU - which we have done to avoid a second battle - could be seen as a retreat/withdrawal. We have relocated ourselves after the battle was over. We have not retreated/withdrawn. 4. Wrong is the title of the page. Now that there's a Second Battle of Krinks, I'd like to see this page renamed to "First Battle of Krinks" rather than "Battle of Krinks". 5. POV is most in this part: "On March 22 the Philosophe Knights declared complete victory and completion of their aims after the previous day's withdrawal of the NSU, the complete removal of non-Knights from Krinks and the pinata-ing of the entire building. Less than a week after entering the conflict, the Knights considered that they had made their lesson abundantly clear and that there was nothing further to accomplish.
With the NSU abandoning the area and the Philosophe Knights indicating that they would leave the area after having taught their lesson to both participants meant that Krinks would be left in the hands of the WWSIS and that the Battle of Krinks would come to a close." I'd like to see that changed. See also my second point. 6. Wrong is this part "The NSU branded this diplomacy and alliance building as "cowardly" due to the fact that WWSIS had made the original declaration of war.", I have edited this to: "LURCS radio station has also made broadcasts in which they called the NSU 'PKs' and 'Murderers'. The NSU called this as "a cowardly way by LURCS to win the sympathy of feral survivors" due to the fact that the groups were at war, and the WWSIS had made the original declaration of war". That are two entire differend things.
So once again: this is the most important stuff is summed up here. This is the reason why I think this page is wrong and POV. I think this page should be rewritten by a neutral person. I would also agree if Iscariot edited it himself, showed it to me, and then edited it himself. --Cornholioo 15:52, 15 April 2010 (BST)
