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:Question: You write that this occurs in the summer of 2009, but most of the quotes are from April? -[[MHS|<span style="color: Black">'''MHS'''</span>]][[User_Talk:MHSstaff|<span style="color: DarkBlue">'''staff'''</span>]] 23:49, 23 September 2012 (BST) | :Question: You write that this occurs in the summer of 2009, but most of the quotes are from April? -[[MHS|<span style="color: Black">'''MHS'''</span>]][[User_Talk:MHSstaff|<span style="color: DarkBlue">'''staff'''</span>]] 23:49, 23 September 2012 (BST) | ||
::Which is technically spring. Fair point. --[[User:Rosslessness|I'm not the Ross UDWiki needs, ]][[User talk:Rosslessness|I'm the Ross it deserves.]] 00:00, 24 September 2012 (BST) | ::Which is technically spring. Fair point. --[[User:Rosslessness|I'm not the Ross UDWiki needs, ]][[User talk:Rosslessness|I'm the Ross it deserves.]] 00:00, 24 September 2012 (BST) | ||
:::It was more that in the text, you had a few references to June, which is confusing (I think the mass needle revive referenced June) and did not make sense with the quote dates. Anyways, you had a couple of misspellings / wrong words and maybe some comma splices, which I made some corrections (or suggestions) here. Feel free to use (or not use) what you want. I also fleshed out the intro a little more. The entire article reads a little like "storytime with Grandpa Ross" which is pretty cool, so if you are doing more of these, you could use that idea to frame the entire series. Anyways, it's a pretty cool little article and makes a lot of sense. Awesome job. -[[MHS|<span style="color: Black">'''MHS'''</span>]][[User_Talk:MHSstaff|<span style="color: DarkBlue">'''staff'''</span>]] 22:21, 24 September 2012 (BST) | |||
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Wow
This looks amazing. Great job! --I'm not the Ross UDWiki needs, I'm the Ross it deserves. 22:14, 23 September 2012 (BST)
- Question: You write that this occurs in the summer of 2009, but most of the quotes are from April? -MHSstaff 23:49, 23 September 2012 (BST)
- Which is technically spring. Fair point. --I'm not the Ross UDWiki needs, I'm the Ross it deserves. 00:00, 24 September 2012 (BST)
- It was more that in the text, you had a few references to June, which is confusing (I think the mass needle revive referenced June) and did not make sense with the quote dates. Anyways, you had a couple of misspellings / wrong words and maybe some comma splices, which I made some corrections (or suggestions) here. Feel free to use (or not use) what you want. I also fleshed out the intro a little more. The entire article reads a little like "storytime with Grandpa Ross" which is pretty cool, so if you are doing more of these, you could use that idea to frame the entire series. Anyways, it's a pretty cool little article and makes a lot of sense. Awesome job. -MHSstaff 22:21, 24 September 2012 (BST)
- Which is technically spring. Fair point. --I'm not the Ross UDWiki needs, I'm the Ross it deserves. 00:00, 24 September 2012 (BST)
